As the second peer evaluation, I have chosen Sevim's blog. In her blog, she has wide variety of paragraphs. The posts are focused on the main themes and developed with approriate supporting ideas. She did a good subject analysis when writing her reflections. She could have been more creative, but still her paragraphs are highly intellectual. In her reflecion on Facebook, she reflected the author ideas explicitly. Also, she has controlled voice to the reader. This is another point that I liked on her blog. Her posts were well-organized. She has majors and minors in all her reflections. In addition, she has not a single paragraph including one or two sentence, which is nice for the supporting of the ideas. She employed necessary connectors in her paragraphs, too. The understanding of the writings was clear because of the proper language use. She has only few minor grammatical mistakes that are not affecting the fluency of the reflecitons. We can understand that she prepared herself for the writings since she has proper evidences and examples for the wrtings, and she made the essential reseach to write the reflections. The texts were coherent in general. Her ideas were totally related to her subjects. After having read her blog, I gained new perspectives on some subjects espacially on language learning and Aziz Sancar. Another point that I like is she avoided using repetition. That is, she used different vocabulary each time. In conclusion, she has done a good job in general sense. If she corrects her little mistakes, she will have perfect paragraphs.
to Sevim Akalın ( http://sevimakalin.blogspot.com.tr/ )
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